Ludum Dare #25compo

You Villain

by cniangel

Overall★★★★★★★★★★2.42

Fun★★★★★★★★★★2.64

Innovation★★★★★★★★★★1.91

Theme★★★★★★★★★★3.92

Humor★★★★★★★★★★2.96

Mood★★★★★★★★★★2.76

Coolness★★★★★★★★★★50%

It's a text adventure story. I'm making it in Twine. You're a villain in a fairyland world. Make a difference in that world by being terrible.

Warning: This is pretty much not for kids at all. I hold no responsibly to how you feel after playing this Twine game. Seriously.

EDIT/UPDATE: I am currently working on a longer, more detailed, and hopefully better version of "You Villain." Stay tune if you wanna feel like a villain ;)

Comments19

dan.jeffrey15 Dec 2012, 17:00

The DL link goes to the Dropbox homepage, bud. :P

CNIAngelauthor15 Dec 2012, 17:18

I know xP I don't have a build up yet. Working out a couple things.

mamoniem17 Dec 2012, 04:42

what a strange game !

CNIAngelauthor17 Dec 2012, 04:56

Why thank you :)

loren17 Dec 2012, 07:12

great narrative, love the intro instalose choice hah

Dark Acre Jack17 Dec 2012, 07:13

I could think of worse things than being stuck with a "chick".

cwilloughby17 Dec 2012, 07:20

I like it. Would love to see it fleshed out more.

Suese17 Dec 2012, 07:41

charming

AaronYip17 Dec 2012, 07:57

Woo! Everybody's happy. :D Charming game, agreed.

CNIAngelauthor17 Dec 2012, 20:24

I'm glad that everyone is enjoying it so far :) I wish I had made it longer though.

Bloodyaugust17 Dec 2012, 22:07

Short, filled with grammatical errors, not much detail to set it apart. Would've liked to see more quality out of a text-based 48 hour game.

CNIAngelauthor17 Dec 2012, 22:37

Thanks for the criticism :) I should point out that I did this in an hour, not 48 of them. It would've been a lot better.

HackThePanda18 Dec 2012, 01:48

For the time he put into it I think it's pretty funny, wish he would have been able to finish his other game though. CNI you should do one of these weekly, with different themes each week and post them on twitter

HackThePanda18 Dec 2012, 01:49

You could follow interesting techy/social stories throughout the week and then make text-based comedy adventures based on them. Like you could have made a text adventure on the shooting.
On second thought maybe this isn't a good idea.

Cake&Code19 Dec 2012, 00:45

loren took the words right out of my mouth, I had to press that first choice. Epic end.

The writing was fun, but it was a bit short (or it feels that way because there are so many branches). Good work! Hope you expand upon it :D

Tobias Wehrum19 Dec 2012, 00:46

Okay, you obviously nailed the theme. (Probably with real nails. Driven into the remains of a princess.) Apart from that, it's a bit short and well - every second move ends the game. When nearly every move is an ending, choice seems to be a bit arbitrary. The humor was nice though.

I think I would've enjoyed the game more if it featured a longer coherent story line. But then again, I just read the comments and found out that you made it in only 1 hour, and for that it's pretty good I guess!

raubana19 Dec 2012, 00:54

The story starts. "You're the villain"........FIVE STARS, TRIPLE PLATINUM, 4 STARS, A+

CNIAngelauthor19 Dec 2012, 02:52

Thanks everyone! :D I'm about to update the summary in a second, but I am currently on a longer and more detailed version of "You Villain" :) In a perfect world it should be done before the year ends.