"so the soul can fly out", what a beautiful thing to say, though i imagine it can come of as insensitive to some.
i like your style and writing, how you're not overly sentimental or dwell on details or use too many descriptions, but instead let each page be a small picture and let me speculate on the other things. really touching story.
one thing though: the choice, it's not clear what it is that you're referring to with the yes/no-answer, "go or not go?" would perhaps work better.
Wait...this is great. Not even sure what I found in it was intentionnaly put there. I will come back and read it over again. Whatever your LD ratings might be in the end, please know you achieved something with this game.
--- It says "“Shit“" on Monday 16:07 after "letting yourself be sent out by the nurse". If this is a typo I think it's ok to correct it now. If it's intentional, nevermind. I also think the yes/no is a little confusing. I thought I had to answer the question : "difficult?".
Ilinx, you're right - it's a typo fault, which doesn't show on my computer. And the music: we tried to link one end with my father's favourite song. But it seems that it fails. Embarrassed, Irma (But thank you for playing it! :))
so I cleared a few faults now, one unclear phrase and the link with the intended song. Hope, the jam rules allow these corrections. Thanks for your suggestions
Well-told, although I thought that some of the choices were unclear and the medium of the interactive narrative could have been utilized better. That said, it's a powerful tale and you really get the sense of emotion from it. The song was a very nice touch too. Overall, very well done, and thanks for sharing this with us.
I am sorry about your fathers death. Great story thought... I included it in my Ludum Dare compilation video series, if you'd like to take a look :) http://youtu.be/Sii3dnpSvEI
i like your style and writing, how you're not overly sentimental or dwell on details or use too many descriptions, but instead let each page be a small picture and let me speculate on the other things. really touching story.
one thing though: the choice, it's not clear what it is that you're referring to with the yes/no-answer, "go or not go?" would perhaps work better.