The Lonely Girl

by kewry
Overall★★★★★★★★★★2.51
Fun★★★★★★★★★★2.31
Innovation★★★★★★★★★★2.13
Theme★★★★★★★★★★2.69
Graphics★★★★★★★★★★1.44
Audio★★★★★★★★★★1.19
Humor★★★★★★★★★★2.07
Mood★★★★★★★★★★2.69
Coolness★★★★★★★★★★72%
"The Lonely Girl" is a text adventure game about a lost little girl, find her way through this place and discover why she is there.

If you get confused about what is going on remember, it's a dream.

This game was made with Unity3D using Twine for faster story writing.

screenshot

Comments20

Masadow16 Dec 2013, 13:12
I would love to have an animation of what's going on at the bottom. I think you was planning to do that since there is the girl at the beginning ?

I couldn't go to the end unfortunately, I don't like much reading and there is nothing more to keep my attention :( Not really your fault, I'm just not a big fan of the gender ;)
kewryauthor16 Dec 2013, 13:21
Thanks Masadow, I did intend to have some graphics behind the play, my arts are just really terrible :P
turnA
turnA16 Dec 2013, 13:33
Interesting... the theme is not at all obvious (especially when you reach the ending quickly). At least I'm not dreaming right now...
PaperBlurt
PaperBlurt16 Dec 2013, 14:52
Huh.. Why use both Unity and Twine?
But also.. why not?

Interesting combo.
chicknstu
chicknstu16 Dec 2013, 14:56
I think I got the first two parts right, but I couldn't work out what to do wit the mole.

Nice work
kewryauthor16 Dec 2013, 15:15
@chicknstu step away and carry on ;)

@PaperBlurt Twine allows for easy and quick decision based story making and although they have their awesome html export I wanted something where I could add 3D to the action (which I failed for multiple reasons :P)
bugninja
bugninja16 Dec 2013, 16:26
Nice way of implementing a choose your own adventure style game. I like it.
loxo16 Dec 2013, 17:08
Nice story with a somewhat short ending. But I needed some attempts to finish it, that's good ;) Some images or the already suggested animations would have been nice. Maybe you find some time to complete it.
scriptorum
scriptorum16 Dec 2013, 17:38
I like abstract application of the theme. Now I have to get some antiseptic for these claw marks on my face.
emmelineprufrock
emmelineprufrock17 Dec 2013, 01:41
Unity + Twine is interesting. I've been considering it myself. Very cool.
Aaants
Aaants17 Dec 2013, 18:19
Nice work - not sure I ever got the 'right' ending though :)
almightysuit
almightysuit18 Dec 2013, 21:45
Hey kewry! Nice entry :) Is it even possible to win? I tried like 10 times and couldn't do it. I did get the eagle to leave me alone though.. I might have to try again sometimes. You should do the jam next time, as others mentioned art would definitely complement well a Twine+Unity entry!
kewryauthor19 Dec 2013, 01:24
Yes, it's possible to win, there's multiple paths but mainly you need to:
- meet the mole and leave the flower alone afterward
- "befriend" the eagle (she might scratch you a couple of times or not touch you at all!)
- befriend the squirrel

the rest of the path should be easy :)
porglezomp
porglezomp19 Dec 2013, 02:29
Quite a nice story! It's a shame you didn't manage to add graphics to it.
ehtd
ehtd19 Dec 2013, 02:30
Interesting game, too bad it was short. Twine and unity, curious combination!
Switchbreak
Switchbreak19 Dec 2013, 04:46
Interesting, I wasn't able to beat it but some of the puzzles seemed pretty cool.
smash ball19 Dec 2013, 16:36
Had you not said to leave the mole alone, I would have never reached the ending. Great game otherwise.
mortus
mortus19 Dec 2013, 17:04
It looks like I've finally found the good ending, but I still didn't understand the place. It was somewhat fun although.
Christina Nordlander
Christina Nordlander20 Dec 2013, 16:57
Very interesting idea, this. The gameplay was... weird. It is definitely a game, insofar as there is a solution that leads to victory, as well as sub-optimal branches that lead to failure, but achieving success seems to be a lot more about trial and error than problem-solving. It's frustrating, but it also helps the dreamlike mood, and I felt motivated enough to play through until I got the happy ending.

On the downside, the writing is very simple and barebones, and there are quite a few typoes, especially early on.

Difficult to rate, but an interesting idea.
Husky
Husky23 Dec 2013, 10:08
Interesting!
It's a nice story :D

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