An Abnormality

by thecain
Overall★★★★★★★★★★2.66
Fun★★★★★★★★★★2.25
Innovation★★★★★★★★★★2.64
Theme★★★★★★★★★★2.57
Humor★★★★★★★★★★1.96
Mood★★★★★★★★★★3.17
Coolness★★★★★★★★★★100%
A short Twine game I made at the last minute. I hadn't planned to enter at all, but changed my mind.
This is the first Twine game I have made.
It's Twine, so presumably it's a HTML5 game, or Java script.

Edit-
Added scroll-bar. One of the scenes was cut off when not in full-screen mode.

Edit 2-
Made window slightly bigger and removed the scroll bar.
Every page should have a link, if you see one that doesn't, please notify me.

Edit 3-
Fixed some typos in the game. Made the [...] option more clear that it was a choice.

Edit 4-
small tweaks. Changed [...] option because I am a very paranoid person.

screenshot
Tools: Twine

Comments38

mf121418 Apr 2016, 22:53
Cool concept for a game about shapeshifting. Would be better if it was a longer but overall good job!
Jordan
Jordan19 Apr 2016, 02:12
The story's well written, though it would have been nice if it were longer.
UnlikelyRogue
UnlikelyRogue19 Apr 2016, 05:37
Ah, I love a little text adventure. That was neat, left just the right amount to imagination. Thanks for this
dammit
dammit19 Apr 2016, 18:17
Needs a little more work to get your ultimate story across.
ConorOD
ConorOD20 Apr 2016, 20:28
I'll just echo what everyone else has said - too short! I enjoyed what was there, and definitely wanted more.
KappaIX
KappaIX20 Apr 2016, 20:32
Interesting and impressionistic? A really good excuse to be able to rate some games!

Well done!
Weeping Rupee
Weeping Rupee21 Apr 2016, 04:09
Cool text adventure. I'm into the enigmatic style. Glad you decided to submit.
KairosXIII21 Apr 2016, 04:11
Clever game, but would have loved to play a little more.
esayitch21 Apr 2016, 06:07
Well-written aside from the occasional typo here and there ("to close" instead of "too close" etc.), and the story had an eerie atmosphere.

Good entry considering the limited time you had!
AnaGF21 Apr 2016, 09:33
Good twine game, it is a little confusing though, I think it would have been better if it was clearer what was going on, but good job
zondarg
zondarg21 Apr 2016, 19:55
Twine, yeah! Short, but with an intense mood. I kinda liked it, even if the later bit was rather linear.
bluszcz
bluszcz23 Apr 2016, 09:14
Haha, nice hack!
ekkiiiii
ekkiiiii23 Apr 2016, 09:58
Nice idea, could have been longer of course. :)
OysterKLAN24 Apr 2016, 06:59
The story is well written but a little confusing. Good job overall, nice use of theme.
marmpa
marmpa24 Apr 2016, 11:55
Really nice text based game.I would like to see some music on it.
fin_nolimit3 May 2016, 02:48
Excellent story writing and use of the theme!!! I like it!!!
Uson Chen3 May 2016, 07:02
Great try, express the ShapeShift theme by a Word game is innovated~
Nomys_Tempar3 May 2016, 07:16
Pretty cool, we're many to do textual adventures on ludum dares. That's a good first game. Ï should try twine myself one day...
Alphish
Alphish3 May 2016, 08:36
Gotta agree with others, it sounds like an interesting story but a tad confusing. Right now my theory is that the shapeshifter's true nature is a word, or something similarly abstract (dunno, it seemed like the book was the home, or something).

Not bad, especially for last-minute excuse for voting in LD. ;)
jofra
jofra4 May 2016, 16:30
Nice concept, very poetic
Jolly Serpent5 May 2016, 05:35
That was pretty cool. Loved the writing style (abrupt, but still fairly descriptive, keeps you in suspence), and from what I could tell it fits the theme nicely, but now I want you to try writing more!
avinashd5 May 2016, 06:00
A bit short, but still entertaining nonetheless. I didn't rate you on humor though (doesn't really make sense to vote for that category)
EvanEGibbs
EvanEGibbs5 May 2016, 07:25
I actually really love the mood to this. I liked that it showed what you clicked on already when you play through again. Some of it was really great poetry. When there is one statement that you have to click on, it really emphasizes it. It's like a new tool to use in creative writing! So a very cool concept.
DSSiege11
DSSiege115 May 2016, 13:30
Interesting game. Well written though a bit confusing at times. Great job anyway ;)
glaze_966 May 2016, 14:44
Really poetic. Nice writing =)
Geckoo1337
Geckoo13377 May 2016, 10:17
Short poetic game which is well written. It could be interesting to continue this project. I like your main idea - to do something in order to rate other games. Well done ++
dcolgan8 May 2016, 02:05
I like this kind of thing a lot. Subtle, does not try to explain itself. You can take the time to figure it out and be rewarded or give up and play more Halo. Pretty good for the time it sounds like you spent.
Blobby1018 May 2016, 08:17
Interesting. Definitely full of atmosphere, but I may be a bit too slow to pick up on the greater meaning!
Jaenis8 May 2016, 15:31
Great atmosphere and cool game!
SantiHisteria9 May 2016, 15:22
Interesting and original idea... but I think you must to introduce more multimedia elements (like fx/music) to make the player feel the story. Good entry.
Green Soda9 May 2016, 16:36
great mood! nice story too... part of myself asks for more xD
Allorius
Allorius9 May 2016, 22:03
I didnt understood a thing but tried to play different braches of story. Misterious and interesting, i would really like to play a full big game with that sort of narrative.
Markus Brand9 May 2016, 22:33
interesting concept of storytelling. definatley not the standard, i liked it
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