I'm Coming To Get My Liver

by phixnay
Overall★★★★★★★★★★3.00
Fun★★★★★★★★★★2.78
Innovation★★★★★★★★★★2.39
Theme★★★★★★★★★★2.44
Humor★★★★★★★★★★2.67
Mood★★★★★★★★★★3.44
This is my first Ludum Dare, and my first few hours using Twine to make something. More of an interactive story than a game -- this is how I wrote "games" on my TI-83+ back in the day.

Just a fun little interactive story that my Dad used to tell me. Not too serious :)

https://pdhixenbaugh.github.io/

screenshot
Tools: Twine

Comments8

kythehuman
kythehuman20 Apr 2020, 05:47
First, I weirdly love good punctuation, and boy you got it. Kudos.

Second, it's a cool little story. Gave me some "In a Dark, Dark Room" vibes. Short, sweet, and to the point. Enjoyed it!
MartinTale20 Apr 2020, 06:27
GOTCHA!!! :D

Lovely game and nice clean design - very easy to read..
bmacintosh
bmacintosh21 Apr 2020, 01:56
Very short, but nice, clean writing. I like the trope of using the player response selections to just kind of add on to the descriptive text. It feels more immersive somehow.
Pilarius22 Apr 2020, 13:24
Quick reminder to get more players: Use a thumbnail for your game. Otherwise your game is presented with this grey box. Some great Games are not played because of a missing thumbnail ... You can still change it by editing your submission page :)
phixnayauthor23 Apr 2020, 19:53
Thanks everyone for the feedback! I'm honestly surprised and happy that anyone played it \:D

And thanks @pilarius for the advice about the thumbnail. I was having trouble in firefox, but switching to Chrome it worked. I think ;)
Pilarius23 Apr 2020, 20:24
@phixnay It works and what a beauty :grin:
I had some goosebumps playing your entry, good writing nice contrast of text and background. Sadly there was no different ending. But other than that good entry :)
phixnayauthor24 Apr 2020, 00:51
Yeah Philarius, in this one, the ghosts always win \:p

I've played some other great games that *are* interactive, like Seedship, which inspired these games. I had some other ideas about gamifying storytelling, but I have a lot to learn about coding for next year!
AdonisDevs
AdonisDevs25 Apr 2020, 19:10
Haha this was a fun little game! It was very well written :)
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